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LOMFic - A Life in Clichés - dorsetgirl
July 5th, 2010
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LOMFic - A Life in Clichés
I decided I really must do the lifein1973 drabble challenge before I forgot how to do it altogether. What came out was 129 words, and although I quite like the finished drabble, I felt that something had been lost, so this is the original with a bit of editing. I'm not claiming this is better, because I think it needs a bit more work that it's never going to get, but I thought I'd post it anyway just so's I can keep on thinking of myself as a LOM writer *g*



Gene had never realised how B.T. - Before Tyler - his thinking had started to run in predictable tracks. Give him a list of five words, and he’d come up with a list of five tired old phrases. Then Sam had breezed in and changed everything. There had been:


Suffering fools gladly


He’d dealt with Tyler on that basis to start with. He’d lasted all of two minutes, because right from the beginning this was:


An affair of the heart


Never before had his heart been so affaired. Which sounded a lot like afeard, when you thought about it. So what he’d obviously needed was:


The hair of the dog


Which was a fine old remedy and one that Gene had always sworn by. Trouble was, ‘the morning after’ now had a whole new meaning. Now, they were:


Stars of the silver screen


He really felt that way sometimes; as if he and Sam were moving weightlessly through some director’s vision of a life, a life so perfect he could scarcely believe it. More than that, it was:


A dream come true


Or it would have been, if he’d ever dared dream such a thing.

But it was definitely true.







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From:thesmallhobbit
Date:July 5th, 2010 06:06 pm (UTC)
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Definitely still a LoM writer - this is great and I like it better than the drabble, 'cos you've expanded the thoughts so well. I can just visualise Gene with a contented smile on his face as the thoughts go through his head.
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From:dorsetgirl
Date:July 5th, 2010 07:26 pm (UTC)
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Thank you! This is fairly close to the original, and I was quite reluctant to lose all of it. I like drabbles, but the form doesn't always serve the story I have on the page.
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